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Weighed
Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (4/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
subalo
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May 5, 2012 |
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You need an editor and a helper. I have gotten much enjoyment out of a few of your other stories but this was very hard to follow, try Names or constant descriptors if possible. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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Feb 9, 2012 |
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It was very difficult for me to get through this one, and the primary problem was dialog identification and the "dialect." First of all, the author wrote the story in first person narrative mode, and in keeping with his format, the author "narrated" in the dialect he imagined the character using. Unfortunately, this dialect was rather difficult to work your way through, though admittedly I could have done it had the other problem not been so prevalent.
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That other problem was the very strange dialog identifiers used. Usually an author will use "I said," or "she said." But in this story, the author attached strange identifiers like "specsy" to some characters and "sexy" to others. No "names" were ever capitalized and the combination made the whole thing a confusing mess, which is too bad because I was enjoying the story.
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Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (5/10)
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