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Training Sarah-Lee
Author: Robin
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(Added on Jan 19, 2012)
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Training of a spoiled rich bitch. Slave training. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
willowspirit
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Oct 5, 2012 |
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So close to perfect...Please write the next chapter!! The misspelling of "new" where "knew" was the correct word got to be very distracting, as was "jewellery" (jewelry), but the latter may just be a British variation.
I've read a number of so-called "training" stories where the author assumes, wrongly, that training means hoisting abuse after abuse upon someone. This master character actually shows that he is worthy of the title "Master" by having mastered an actual knowledge, psychological insights, and skill sets so rare in all these "training" stories. As a real life Lifestyle submissive personality woman who is being trained by her Master to become His all-around life-slave, thank you!
I hope to see "Y" become trained for other service and behavioral modifaction besides just the sexual. (9/10)
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tutcint
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Feb 16, 2012 |
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I liked the story very much and cann't wait to the next part of her training ;-) (8/10)
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kemosabe
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Jan 26, 2012 |
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The misused words were a real distraction for me )no for know, etc). The girl's immediate reaction to her "training" seemed rather improbable as well. Still, there was a glimmer of eroticism that makes me say it is better than most. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
castle2001
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Jan 20, 2012 |
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Much better than average training fantasy. Alix's comments noted. While I agree, there is much in this bodes well for Robin's future as a writer.
Has an Austenest view of the female trainee. Thankfully lacks the bloody brutality of teenage stuff.
I await the ornamentation and future interaction with the father. The later is a good place for wild imagination. (9/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 20, 2012 |
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Alix is right. Good Story.
But not that well written, mind. Some paragraphs drown in too many details which add nothing to the story and as such do nothing else but distract from the main plot.
There's the repetitive words, used three, four times in one paragraph -synonyms are a much needed ace up the sleeve- and the lack of punctuation marks in a lot of places.
Then there's the rather odd character Roger. A man with a lifestyle and disposition which inspires me to not even let him look after my dog for an hour, let alone my daughter for him to "instruct" for longer periods of time.
After the pick-up at the airport, the story slips off into a certain routine which to me sounded rather unispired and was written in such a way that one could surmise beforehand what would happen next, taking any possible tension out of the tale.
So, again, yes, a good story, but one written in a rather lackluster fashion, with bursts of detailed descriptions followed by pedestrian happenings.
Room for improvement.
JJ (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Alix
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Jan 19, 2012 |
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Good story (8/10)
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