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The Instruction of Hitomi Yarada
Author: FP37
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(Added on Nov 13, 2010)
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A rebellious student returns to her former school having been transformed into a sex slave. She completes her transformation into a depraved slut and bondage whore. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
b_rad20000
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Dec 5, 2010 |
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I don't know why everyone is so down on this story. People claiming that it's "basic and like a ton of other stories" should either give helpful suggestions or not read the story! I've never actually read another story like this and I think it's great. Please continue to write it. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
FP37
(Edit) (Dec 5, 2010)
- Dear B Rad,
Thanks for the message. It is nice to read some supportive comments. The story was written as a homage to Mikoshiro's cartoon. You should go to the link at the bottom of the page. There are some translations around, but not for this edition. Some of his work is a bit raw for my taste, but I must confess to being a fan of bondage and humiliation. I will probably have a stab at writing other stories based on comics or 3D artwork, so if you have any suggestions for future projects, I promise to have a look.
Thanks again.
Peter
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JimmyJump
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Nov 15, 2010 |
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Rather ridiculous story, I'm sad to say. The writing was okay, but the descriptions are shallow, the storyline has been done to death (and way better).
Right from the start, I had a feeling this was somehow related to some or other Japanese form of comics, thanks to the childish style, the 'shouting' of 'severe depravation' (while nothing out of the ordinary --for an erotic BDSM story that is-- is going on).
A lot of bleating and no wool is what "The Instruction Of Hitomi Yarada" comes down to.
Since FP37 seems to have the technical skill to write a story, I'm eagerly awaiting something original from this author.
JJ (5/10)
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Major Littmann
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Nov 14, 2010 |
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I found it a bit stilted and some of the descriptions ony made sense with reference to the hentai illustrations in the hyperlink, so it was very nearly a 10 but for now I'll give it 9 (9/10)
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- Replied by:
FP37
(Edit) (Nov 14, 2010)
- Thanks for your thoughts. There was a problem writing text for every page of Mikoshiro's tale, and it does now seems rather slow. I am grateful for the 9/10. I have sent 25 chapters of another story to Literotica, and most of it has been there for more than two months without attracting a single public comment. I hope others will add their thoughts.
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