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Wrong Assumptions
Author: Nominalista
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(Added on Apr 8, 2010)
(This month 66794 readers) (Total 81175 readers) |
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An undercover agent investigates a secretive ponygirl riding club. He suspects that the girls are kept there against their will and plans a police action to free them. In order to act, he needs a witness, but his stratagem does not yeld the testimony he needs. He is then forced into a surprising lifestyle change and he is made to understand that freedom and slavery have a very different meaning for ponies. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
noir
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May 14, 2010 |
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Hate to give the lowest score thus far but the story is exactly as the score of seven indicates, good and (definitely) worth reading.
I love plots but yours actually had too much! Or perhaps not enough sex for balance.
Do keep writing. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Major Littmann
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Apr 21, 2010 |
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Predictable perhaps but enjoyable, the girls language is a bit stilted maybe but the story is most enjoyabe (8/10)
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- Replied by:
nominalista
(Edit) (Apr 23, 2010)
- Thank you for your remarks! The girl's language is very stilted, and intentionally so. The idea is that you should wonder why she talks in such a stiff and artificial way.
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| Reviewer:
scottishgent
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Apr 17, 2010 |
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Good story line so far (even thought I can see where it is going) and nice detail. Looking forward to the rest of it. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
nominalista
(Edit) (Apr 23, 2010)
- was I so obvious? Dammit :-)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Apr 12, 2010 |
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i thought this was going to be a rather predictable story, but a nice little twist at the end. There is potential for continueing this story for a few more chapters. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
nominalista
(Edit) (Apr 23, 2010)
- The second chapter is out now, I am not sure I will want to add a third one. It has a certain completeness right now.
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