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Anne's story
Author: curiouskitten
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(Added on Mar 30, 2010)
(This month 24907 readers) (Total 49096 readers) |
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Anne has to deal with home life and a new boy at school. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 12, 2010 |
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A bit of an uneven afair, this is. While the storyline is okay, Curiouskitten seems to nevertheless struggle a bit with her writing.
I feel it has to do with the inbalance between the narrative and the long pieces of conversation. Should those dialogues be intersperced with a bit of the narrative --giving some background or added info about feelings and inner musings between the lines of dialogue-- the story would come across as much more even.
A lot could also have to do with a degree of inexperience.
But I must add that Curiouskitten shows promise and that the skills will be honed as more stories follow...
JJ (7/10)
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Michael247
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Apr 5, 2010 |
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I'm not going to do a full and complete review/analysis like I usually do with stories because this one is so obviously incomplete. Despite the replication of one whole major part, not to mention some minor grammatical errors, this story had a lot to offer. I feel that the introduction of the Pete character is odd, especially since it goes nowhere. Maybe it foreshadows something later on, but right now it's not contingent with what is going on between Luke and Anne. Write the rest. (6/10)
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goldfing
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Apr 3, 2010 |
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I hope you continue. (9/10)
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Alin X Zane
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Apr 3, 2010 |
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I enjoyed reading this and hope to read more chapters soon, fixing the spelling mistakes and grammatical errors will also make it easier for others to read and it shows great promise for a brilliant read
Truthfully
X (5/10)
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