|
|
|
|
|
Institute of Corrections for Beautiful Girls
Author: Michael Brewer
|
| |
(Added on Feb 1, 2009)
(This month 136590 readers) (Total 184326 readers) |
| |
This story takes place in a modern day Western country with one slight deviation from reality: there\'s been a growing consensus in society that beautiful young women have grown completely out of control with regards to their sense of entitlement and selfishness. Whether this accusation is correct or not is irrelevant. Suffice to say that a strong lobby of men as well as quite a few not-so-attractive women successfully pushed a notion to create a network of high-security prisons meant to \"reform\" beautiful young girls deemed to be on a wayward path. This story takes place in one such a prison and describes the experiences of a girl named Melissa. |
| Ratings and Reviews: |
| Number
of Ratings: 6 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
| 1 |
2 |
3 |
4 |
5 |
6 |
7 |
8 |
9 |
10 |
| 0% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
33% |
0% |
33% |
33% |
|
Weighed
Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (10/10) |
Lowest
Rating:  (7/10) |
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
sissykris
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jan 29, 2011 |
| |
I can't wait for more! There are still some very minor spelling issues that need to be worked out but so far I have only caught one or two (9/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
bambam243
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Apr 11, 2010 |
| |
I really enjoyed the first chapters of the story in early '09 and it was great to come back here and see the new chapters that have been added in the meantime. Quality had remained superb, with a renewed focus on fine psychological humiliation aspects.
The flashback to Melissa's initial arrest was a great idea and I would be interested in seeing a continuation of the flashback during Melissa's trial, interaction with lawyers and parents throughout the trial (subject for more humiliation as they would see her in restraints), her initial reactions to receiving physical punishments from the guards etc.
In terms of further development ideas, as Melissa has now moved to the more sever block D of the ICBG prison, it would be also nice to see a variation of punishments in this more secure environment, such as punishment she would have to either inflict on herself or contribute to the punishment, like maintaining difficult positions for a long period of time under threat of further punishment if position is broken, or having to hold her palms or feet up to be beaten by the guards.
Another possible development idea could be that one morning Melissa has the surprise of being chained up with one of her girlfriends from her former pampered life who has just been sentenced to the ICBG. Again a lot of conversation opportunities possible there.
All in all, an amazing story. Can't wait for the new chapters coming in! (10/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
Vynter
(Edit) (Apr 16, 2010)
- I'd love to see some orgasm denial/enforced chastity with constant teasing to keep Melissa hot and bothered all the time. This could be coupled with intense tickle torture and "edging," but never allowing her to orgasm. Keep these pretty young things sexually frustrated all the time in retaliation for their haughty cockteasing pre-prison.
Also maybe a full head shaving or other demeaning punishment.
Also I'd prefer seeing the "Lockup in Level D" storyline continued rather than more pre-arrest flashbacks, but that's just my opinion. I think we have enough background info already.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Ramonde2
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Apr 5, 2010 |
| |
The author has asked for ideas. How about writing a prologue? Suggest Melissa's horror when arrested to find she is to be handcuffed, even more so when she finds that her hands are the be fastened behind. Detailed description of cuffs their adjustment and double locking to prevent overclosure, Application of gag following loud protests and so on. If he still wants idears I will be happy to provide some. (10/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
Ramonde2
(Edit) (Apr 6, 2010)
- Just noticed that you had already done it. Good.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Vynter
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Feb 16, 2010 |
| |
Great story, I am really enjoying it! Though I was surprised that Ch 8 was a "flashback"- i can't wait to re-join melissa after her night in the iron maiden.
For a first story this is really good stuff- you're better than 95% of the stuff on this site.
Have you read any of Ladyvet's stuff? She has a couple great prison stories - her stuff might give you some good ideas for development. She has a great little piece called Joanne's Last Anniversary, check it out. (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
Vynter
(Edit) (Mar 5, 2010)
- when are the new chapters coming? don't keep us in suspense!
- Replied by:
carlsberg24
(Edit) (Mar 14, 2010)
- Thanks for the comments. I have written quite a bit of the further plot, but there are some gaps to fill between different chapters so some patience is required before they are ready. Unfortunately I have a lot of everyday business to attend to and precious few moments where I have both the leisure and inspiration to write at the same time.
- Replied by:
Ramonde2
(Edit) (Apr 5, 2010)
- I would put a higher percentage 98% better than most of the other stories. incidentally where would I find Ladyvet' stuff? Please give detailed directions.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
redwrangler
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Feb 8, 2009 |
| |
Like the start and feel of this story. Perhaps have her curtsey in respect to the guards and staff with red hot spanked bottom would be a welcome walk in this story. The pretty girl could be spanked with their own wooden backed hairbrush they spend so much time brushing through their precious hair.
Also an asshole examination as part of a more humiliating complete OBGYN Exam wpuld be rewarding for the reader and advance Melissa's feeling of helplesness. I will watch and read further installments and revisit my rating (7/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
carlsberg24
(Edit) (Feb 8, 2009)
- Thanks for the suggestions. Ideas for story development are much appreciated. This is really the first story I've ever written so obviously it's not that polished.
Also, bear with me if the story seems a bit slow. It's meant to be this way at least in the beginning to create better immersion, context and develop the characters. There is plenty of wickedness in store for Melissa and her fellow prisoners.
I have written two further chapters already and they should be added to the site within the next few days.
- Replied by:
Ramonde2
(Edit) (Apr 6, 2010)
- Difficult to curtsy when in the nude and cuffed. Why have an interest in the rectum when there is a much more accommodating and interesting part of the female anatomy near by. Examination of the part by a stranger will be just as humiliating. Suggest carried out with subject upside down,enroute to cleaning(car wash type)area.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
kemosabe
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Feb 3, 2009 |
| |
A rather slow start but promising. I'm a big fan of women in prison stories and the premise for this one is new. I hope the action picks up a bit in succeeding chapters. If so, the rating may be higher. (7/10)
|
|
|
About 