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The Crime Scene
Author: Sandra Lyden
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(Added on Jun 8, 2008)
(This month 48546 readers) (Total 58130 readers) |
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Sent out to check a security break at a warehouse Misty winds up being checked out herself as a sex slave... |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Boundtowrite
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Jun 10, 2008 |
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Certainly has potential and is more than the usual "wham-bam" kidnap/rape theme with a BDSMversion of the Stockholmsyndrome. And ofcourse many many bondage positions, that really gets your mind-cinema working!!
Needs some working over though: many typos, I would really cut down on the "SMACKs" and "SLAPs"
Also some continuity errors: it is rather hard to ballgag the victim AFTER you pulled a hood over her face, some paragraph's seem to be in the wrong order.
For a first time story it is enjoyable and I think if the author works it over (and that needn't be much work..) it would become a good story and nice to read and my rating would be higher. (6/10)
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