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    | Reviewer: 
    chksng19
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    Sep 30, 2007 | 
   
   
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        I'm guessing English is not your first language. If that is the case, the story is good but hard to read, due to missing articles and noun/verb agreement, along with some other concerns. You could find yourself an editor to help you along; this could help with story scores and reader count. (6/10) 
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        - Replied by: 
wei wei
  (Edit)  (Sep 30, 2007)
 
        - Yes, you are right. My mother tongue is Indonesian, and I'm just a beginner. I have a lot of idea in my mind, but I find quite difficult to express them in the English language. Can you give me a suggestion. Thank you, from wei wei.
 
       
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