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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
(Edit) |
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Jun 25, 2007 |
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better then the 1st one, but keep in mind aswith any theme or story concept you can only do so much with 1 basic idea (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Jun 16, 2007 |
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H Dean hit it right on the head (ouch) -- this story reads like someone about twelve wrote it. I found found when writing myself that if some aspect of the story is very sexually exciting to the writer, they rush to get to that part. Take a deep breath when writing, and wait to masterbate to it AFTER you are finished! (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Jun 16, 2007 |
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I had higher hopes for this story after seeing a rather positive review. Unfortunately, the same troubles that nagged the other story of yours that I reviewed nag this one. This story is told in an overly simplistice fashion and reads like a children's book. Everything happens with extreme ease and very quickly. Sarah, slow down. You are getting to the finish line too quickly. Take the time to craft an erotic story, don't just tell a story with an erotic hook. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Razor7826
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Jun 15, 2007 |
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Very nice story, albeit short. Also, the pictures did not display for me. (9/10)
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