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Downward spiral
Author: Memento
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(Added on Mar 29, 2007)
(This month 66384 readers) (Total 94835 readers) |
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Just another non-shakespearian happy-painslut-story. This is an older one. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 31, 2009 |
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Memento warned us that this is an earlier story, and to be honest, it shows.
First of all, there's the lack in detail. Okay, so Memento isn't the most detail-orientated scribbler, but usually he has a way of describing things acurately in short brush-strokes, which leave not much to the imagination. Here, it isn't the case and there's a lot of holes left to be filled (no pun intended).
Secondly, there's also quite a lot (more than usual) spelling mistakes.
But for the rest, this story bears the recognizable Memento signature, of crude, hard humiliation, which is always a pleasure to read.
JJ (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 23, 2009 |
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very nice reading (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
HighPhoenix
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Apr 6, 2007 |
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Nice Story, but could be a bit more detailed. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Greg
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Apr 1, 2007 |
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I enjoy it. Lost detail about midway through, possible too many toys introduced. Could use a proof reader.... The typos and takes away from a story... Hay, They made me say it... I like short stories and it okay. I can see Sarah dry humping in the close for her friends with an electrod on her ass and pussy, Hehehe...
Good luck. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Jan 31, 2009)
- I wonder why you're deducting points for spelling mistakes? The way you've written yer reply reminds me of something including a pot and a kettle...
JJ
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| Reviewer:
25toLife
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Mar 30, 2007 |
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Could use a proof reader.... The typos and mistaken facts takes a lot away from a story. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
pollycoventry
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Mar 30, 2007 |
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REALLY LOVELY
JUST A DREAM OF HEAVEN (10/10)
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