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Hypocrisy and Other Women Author: MycroftXXXX
(Added on Jan 19, 2007) (This month 57396 readers) (Total 75416 readers)
Claire thinks that her husband\'s affair will give her a quick and easy exit to a disastrous marriage, but she underestimated what the other woman knows about her own past.

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Reviewer: azrlg17 (Edit) Rating: Jan 25, 2007
Wow. The second chapter rocked. The only thing I didn't like was the start. I mean even very successful lawyers get divorced. And their ex-spouses walk away with lots of money. Even if they were unfaithful.
Spelling and grammar are adequate but could be improved. (6/10)
Replied by: MycroftXXXX (Edit) (Jan 25, 2007)
Thank you kindly for the review. I definitely need to start spending more time in the editing process since even I get quite surprised by some of the dumb mistakes I make, so I guess I will just have to learn some patience and take my time writing/posting ^-^.
As for believability, I have to confess that for me it was never really an issue. If a premise is hot, I am willing to suspend a substantial amount of disbelief (besides, I hardly want this site to become a how to guide to on forcing people into sex!), but I understand your point. I hope it doesn’t hinder your enjoyment of future chapters too much!
…and that I learn to cut down on the use of exclamation points in reviews -_-‘.

Reviewer: TammiB (Edit) Rating: Jan 21, 2007
A very interesting scene to set, the plot started well, the descriptions were fairly vivid, the characters good so far. As a personal opinion I would have liked and found it slightly more believable were the "seduction" or its relative ease to be better explained or drawn out. This did not stop me enjoying it a great deal, and I for one am very curious as to where this goes...don't take too long :-D (8/10)
Replied by: MycroftXXXX (Edit) (Jan 21, 2007)
Thank you for both the kind words and the advice. I know exactly what you mean about the seduction, and I am not 100% happy with it myself. Ideally it would be a much longer process that really built up the erotic tension, but I confess that I did not really feel my writing was up to the task. Hopefully with a bit of practice, reflection and editing I will manage to introduce more of that into later chapters, maybe even revise this one. Thank you again and I hope part 2 impresses you even more!

Reviewer: msnaughtygrrl (Edit) Rating: Jan 21, 2007
i love a naughty tale and the damsel in distress is always a favorite hon .. please do tell us more (8/10)
Replied by: MycroftXXXX (Edit) (Jan 21, 2007)
Thanks for the generous review; damsels in distress have always been a favorite of mine. I am working on a second chapter to the story, and have a broad outline of the plot arc (such as it is) in my head. Still, I am going to try to work on my righting style (I think I come off a bit too clinical) so it will probably be a little bit.

Reviewer: mkemse (Edit) Rating: Jan 20, 2007
nice start where to next (7/10)
Replied by: MycroftXXXX (Edit) (Jan 20, 2007)
First off, thanks for being my first review. It’s nice to know that my first shot did not just slide into obscurity! Second, I am working on the second part of the story, but it may take a little longer since this segment was mainly an ice breaker for me. Hopefully, that extra attention will help nudge your up your opinion.

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