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African Slave Queen -enslaved media babe
Author: Finc
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(Added on Jan 2, 2007)
(This month 65131 readers) (Total 88153 readers) |
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Rachel Goodbody is sexy, feisty and her channels number one reporter. But an insulted African dictator has other plans, turning her into his most amazing sex slave ever. Alone and with no hope of rescue she has to bow to his every peverse whim. Opening a world of sexual humiliation and horror. Character based on Brit TV babe Sarah Alexander |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 7, 2010 |
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Although littered with a massive amount of errors, run-on sentences with parts of supposedly new lines added to them, I still found "African Slave Queen..." an above average story. One which I liked. Well, at least the content.
While I agree with Good Grip about not being too harsh on the rating for errors and stuff, I still feel that the story severely suffers under those mistakes.
As such, I don't think that the 'repeating paragraph' which Good Grip speaks of, was due to some or other corruption of the text, rather stuff that got left behind while Finc made some corrections...
Anyway, I too was hoping on some form of continuation of this possible series. But I noticed that Finc seems to have made himself pretty scarse since January 2007.
Maybe this review will awaken him. Or get me a contract on my head.
JJ (8/10)
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mkemse
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Sep 9, 2008 |
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wonderful (10/10)
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Good_Grip
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Jan 4, 2007 |
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This is a great, great story. It was well written, for the most part. There is one place where some paragraphs were repeated. Look at the paragraph that starts with the sentence "She delivered the greasy wet ball onto the bed the thing instantly deflating"
I, unlike some other reviewers on this forum, do not give a substatially lower rating becuase of grammer errors unless the story is practically unreadable. I realize that the authors posting to this forum are not professionals.
I really liked the theme of the story and detail descriptions. In addition you seem to have ended the story in a responsible fashion.
Further stories of Rachel's continuing debasement, separate form this one, would be a good thing.
Thanks for posting. (8/10)
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finc
(Edit) (Jan 5, 2007)
- thanks. I do shift my documents around a lot and it looks like it might have been corrupted,sorry for that.
There are 3 more in the slave queen series i,ll wait for a few more reviews then i,ll post the next
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kemosabe
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Jan 2, 2007 |
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Not an original theme but interesting nevertheless. A rereading would perhaps eliminated quite a few typos and misused words. The author doesn't appear to be well versed in the English language but the ideas do come through (5/10)
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