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Treasure worth fucking for
Author: George C. Jones
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(Added on Dec 20, 2006)
(This month 48616 readers) (Total 68249 readers) |
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this story is about a guy and his girl freind that are captured and she is sexuly tortured and forced the tell the location of a sunken treasure they found. |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
oldtom
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Dec 30, 2006 |
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pretty much what others have said. Needed more detail. Does the boy worry that the girl wouldn't settle for his cock anymore. Does she ask for more. Does the torture turn her on or just the sex? Why did the men let them go? could have been more torture. Maybe his friend would rescue them and torture the torturers.. All sorts of possibilities (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
DeGrinch
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Dec 25, 2006 |
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Peter Benchley would be pissed if he read this story, the plot was clearly stolden, and you should get a spell checker. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Dec 22, 2006 |
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Yup it's OK but you need to proof read before you post a story or better yet get a fresh set of eyes to proof read it for you. Feel free to elaborate on your bdsm scenes no need to rush right through. I'm sure you can do better next time. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Dec 22, 2006 |
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no real plot, to short and appears to be very rushed for posting (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lee Boudine
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Dec 21, 2006 |
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A classic plot, but not really developed. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Dec 21, 2006 |
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Poorly written and rushed: just another "kidnapped and abused in front of her guy" story. There are likely 1000 just in the Library here. A little electric torture, some poorly done bondage. Disappointing; there are 100 ways the story could have gone to make it more exciting, stimulating, and longer. Way too little of her feelings and thoughts, almost none of her boyfriend's.
There is potential to make the story MUCH better; why not ask for help? (3/10)
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Tease Cathy
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Dec 20, 2006 |
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while there were grammer mistakes, the story was good, really, I loved it. It was a bit on the short side, and I wish there was more stories of the too.. I mean, hes got a HOT girlfriend, according to the description... anyways, I liekd it alot, and Look forward to reading more by you (6/10)
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