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A Brides Time to Pay
Author: Jon Maddux
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(Added on Dec 18, 2006)
(This month 55940 readers) (Total 80629 readers) |
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A snobby elitist bitch receives a cherished gift on her wedding day! |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Misschief
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Jan 8, 2012 |
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I only had a few minutes to "speed read" this story; thoroughly enjoyable though.. (8/10)
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bmtphoenix
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Oct 12, 2007 |
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Excellent story, excellent creativity, extremely well written. (10/10)
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mlyniam
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Apr 1, 2007 |
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Didn't care too much for the idea, but otherwise good. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
bmtphoenix
(Edit) (Oct 12, 2007)
- Dude you can't ding someone because you don't like the idea...that's just wrong.
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Dec 25, 2006 |
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Not bad as vengeance stories go. Yes they have been done to death here but this one has a few things working in its favor. First, its well written second, as a story, its well told. The two major characters are developed enough to each have a distinct and believable personality and 'voice'. Finally you do manage to put a new twist on an old tale. Well done. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Dec 26, 2006)
- I thank you for your review and your very kind words. I have only submitted a few stories on here and was very nervous about doing so to begin with. I have received some very uplifting and positive comments to date and its reviews like this one that encourage me to write and submit more works. Thank you again!
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| Reviewer:
finc
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Dec 21, 2006 |
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I like the sentence-"after using her like an inflatable doll" - creates a great imagery and sense of how he relates to her. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Dec 21, 2006)
- thank you few who have taken your time to review and provide feedback for my latest story. I try to provide a lot of detail in how the women look and how the guy views them. In my last story i was told i failed to provide enough insight into why the rapist chose his victim. Fair enough critique so i tried to reread this one and make sure his POV was clear. She is a vessel, something for him to deposit his seed in, nothing loving, nothing caring, just a vessel... the equivalent of an inflatable doll he can hump and cum in. Thanks Again!
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Dec 21, 2006 |
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great story, great flow (10/10)
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fantazmaster
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Dec 21, 2006 |
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I will rate this one as well.Intestingly enough,the author received quite a bit of crticism for simply asking for reviews prior to posting additional chapters to his recent story 'Business Bitch".It is illuminating that he received far more reviews and comments on this previous story vs this story some 5000 plus views and no reviewsbeyond the author's and this review.I guess gets no more than they ask for in life in general and in this sort of writing in particular. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
JonMaddux
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Dec 20, 2006 |
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Hell no one else wants to rate it i will! (10/10)
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