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The Continuing Chronicles of Alexa
Author: Brazen Bitch
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(Added on May 15, 2006)
(This month 56084 readers) (Total 78001 readers) |
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A sadistic lesbian dominant hunts for a masochistic lesbian submissive in order to satisfy her perverted desires |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JonMaddux
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Dec 6, 2006 |
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I thought the attention to detail in your story was very good. I suppose some of the points made below are good ones as to the faults in the plotline however i found it entertaining and liked it. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
BrazenBitch
(Edit) (Jan 19, 2007)
- thanks! i see you've written a lot of reviews. it's great that you so often take the time to send feedback, and even when you have something critical to say, it's always presented in a positive manner. that's very very courteous. i've actually done a little editing and will send in an updated version.
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| Reviewer:
azrlg17
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Nov 10, 2006 |
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Of course on the first page of abduction for dummies it says "let a lot of people see you with your victim and make sure you pay at one of the places with your credit card so that the police really has no problems to find you". The Domme is so stupid she deserves a Darwin award.
Aside from that the sex is hot but I don't like Doms who have butlers and bodyguards do their dirty work.
And the cliche of the rape victim realizing after one orgasm that she should be a 24/7 slave for all time is just dumb. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
BrazenBitch
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2006)
- gee, why don't you really tell me what you think? just how are your rude comments constructive?
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| Reviewer:
Michelle Byssom
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May 17, 2006 |
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I think perhaps I'm being too hard on this story, but I would have liked the author to have used language with more care: often, inappropriate words (eg, "proscribed") or well-worn phrases which have lost their verbal excitement enter into the narrative. They're like cracks on a record, after, you have to start to build the mood again. Dialogue - think of how those words actually sound when they're said! As for deeper content: I really had hoped for an exploration of the victim or her master's psychology: why did the woman decide on that night of all nights? What had happened to her previous pets? And what kind of person was the slave? How does she react to being picked up by a rich butch lesbian? The episode with her knife - how does it serve to drive the story on? We should at least have been prepared for some reaction like that from the girl otherwise it's just gratuitous. Her feelings clearly change, and I missed the transition. Of course, the excitement in the tale is in the action of raping the girl and brutalising her, and I thought the hints as to her future were well dropped. The story is a well worn one, a classic 'myth' of our time that has been told in numerous renditions. So it's very important to tell it extremely well to make this telling stand out. I think in the end what I reacted badly to was the telegraphic nature of the writing - or is it simply that I want to linger where the author skates? (5/10)
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- Replied by:
BrazenBitch
(Edit) (May 19, 2006)
- Sorry to hear that you didn't like the story so much. Not sure what you mean by, "the telegraphic nature of the writing". However, upon reading through your comments, I'm not 100% sure you actually read the story before giving it a low score and writing your commentary. Pretty much all your questions are clearly answered in the story. You seemed to have missed more than just 'the transition'. The story clear shows her reaction to being picked up by a rich woman. Of course, she who she thinks picked her up isn't quite right as she finds out later. The purpose of the knife is for the effect of irony. Lots of single women - straight or gay - have something for protection in their pocket or their purse, but in her case, it gets used against her, just like the cops are always warning. Oh, and the rich lesbian isn't really a 'butch'. That's too stereotypical. Just because a woman is a top or dominant, doesn't make her 'butch'.
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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May 17, 2006 |
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Great Story!! From start to finish. I hope there will be more to come of her new life. (9/10)
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BrazenBitch
(Edit) (May 17, 2006)
- Thanks for the great review, La Toya! Stay tuned for more episodes. And if only I could find an illustrator, but I'm working on it...
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| Reviewer:
yamesh
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May 16, 2006 |
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I love it. Very well written and nicely detailed. I'm glad to see some other strong F/f stories and can't wait for more. You have a fine talent! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
BrazenBitch
(Edit) (May 16, 2006)
- WOWSER, 10/10 - Thanks so much. Do please come back in a few days when Rabbit has a chance to put up the updated version. And here's a secret, I have 12 to 15 more stories already written, and awaiting editing.
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 16, 2006 |
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not bad, well witten and I love your pen name (7/10)
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- Replied by:
BrazenBitch
(Edit) (May 17, 2006)
- thanks! been using the name forever. by the way, what would it take for a story to get a higher rating from you?
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| Reviewer:
Paul Dessert
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May 16, 2006 |
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couldn't stop reading it. very nicely done. looking forward to the next chapters (9/10)
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- Replied by:
BrazenBitch
(Edit) (May 16, 2006)
- Thank you Paul for making the first comment on my first story posted, and for giving it such a high review. In fact, I see that this is your first review ever, so it's a big night all round. By the way, the Library should shortly be changing the story to an updated version. It's starts a tiny bit differently, and fixes a few typos.
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