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Zombie Sex Slave
Author: Yamesh
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(Added on May 11, 2006)
(This month 69645 readers) (Total 96771 readers) |
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A doctor and her evil assistant experiment with a deadly neurotoxin on an unwilling woman to create a sex slave. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
(Edit) |
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Jan 14, 2012 |
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This was a good story up until the unfinished end. What did they do to her? What was her future? Unfinished stories drive me crazy!!! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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May 24, 2006 |
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The story, as has been said already, is off to a good start. Not as good a start as your previous tale, however. There are technical deficiencies with this tale that I did not see in your previous tale; run on sentences, out of place commas and some oddly constructed sentences. This made me re-read many passages to make certain I had the proper gist. So, flow was an issue. At any rate, I look forward to future updates.
*Update: I must say that I really liked the description of the rape and its eventual outcome. It was quite good. Some technical errors still exist but they are far from distracting. As with your last tale, I find it to be compelling as a read and am looking forward to the next installment. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (May 14, 2006)
- Thank you for your constructive comments.
- Replied by:
H Dean
(Edit) (May 15, 2006)
- I read your previous comment, before editing. I promise to re-review when you post an update and if you post a revision. You are quite good and I suspect this tale will only improve over time.
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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May 15, 2006 |
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As mentioned the story got off to a good start but second part about the rape of Debra seemed a bit out of place. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (May 16, 2006)
- Thank you for your comments! There is a very good possibility that the rape plays a future part in the story.
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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May 14, 2006 |
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A fine beginning. As mentioned, some few tech details: beware of foreign words. The drink of Champagne is spelled differently from the city of Champaign.
The story shows vast promise. Anxious for more! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (May 23, 2006)
- Thank you. I have fixed some of the problems.
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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May 12, 2006 |
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A good start, but lets see were you go with it (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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May 12, 2006 |
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The story has a potential, but let see what will follow. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
yamesh
(Edit) (May 25, 2006)
- ouch!
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