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Observatory Slave
Author: Sweta M
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(Added on Feb 17, 2006)
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an Indian girl accepts a 24X7 slavery job in a serene observatory in Europe. She relocates to serve 5 men & 3 women staff of the observatory as their domestic slave. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 30, 2009 |
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This promises to be a bumpy ride. Not that the story is eyewatering bad, not at all, it's just that the start has that air of being interesting and detailed, while it is in fact boring and too general. "Suburban Indian woman" and a "reputed Indian University" may sound good, it isn't exactly an example of deep-rooted research.
Also, I wonder why folks keep cramming whole novels into one-paragraph descriptions. The road to how and why is done away with in exactly two paragraphs, while it should at least have been elaborated on during a couple of chapters...
Anyway, after the rather shaky start, the story settles somewhat, but never reaches a level of believability.
With a bit of work, this story could be transformed into something way, way better, because the ingredients are there. Alas, it wasn't to be.
JJ (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
bigcat
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Feb 20, 2006 |
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Great start to an erotic adventure. Look forward to furture installments. Some awkward use of language but easily overlooked because of the content. Well done. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
dnotned
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Feb 20, 2006 |
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A very good start. A believable narative. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
gentleman
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Feb 19, 2006 |
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Excellent beginning. That she has to go naked to the mens' room used by the guards in the parking garage is very hot. Lots of potential here, and a hot beginnning of a naked slave story. (9/10)
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jip
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Feb 19, 2006 |
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Very good start. Not exagerated. relaistic. Sexy.
Hope more is to come. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Feb 18, 2006 |
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It's a good start to the story. Lets see were you take it before I raise my rating (7/10)
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