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Last training day of Takira
Author: T Bone Steak
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(Added on Jan 2, 2006)
(This month 60784 readers) (Total 83090 readers) |
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In the future, adopted children are unregistered once they reach the age of eighteen. They\'re trained to become registered. Takira is such a girl. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 15, 2011 |
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More like a "Mills & Boone" romance story with no romance, Some characterization and emotions from someone would have helped. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rabbit1
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Apr 27, 2006 |
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Developing well please keep it going (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Kiri
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Jan 10, 2006 |
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This could be interesting, but the way in which it was written means that it's quite hard work to read. If the style of the next chapters are improved it should be a very entertaining read. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Travis
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Jan 10, 2006 |
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Fun concept but written pretty poorly; underdeveloped paragraphs and grammer mistakes made it tough to get into. (3/10)
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H Dean
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Jan 9, 2006 |
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Not a bad story in the least. However, it did suffer from a lack of "feeling". That is to say that it was rather clinical. If sci-fi and interesting devices is your "thing" this should hit the spot. To be fair, sci-fi, overall, is not my choice in erotic literature. So, my enjoyment of this tale may have suffered, somewhat, due to that factor. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 8, 2006 |
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altho it was a good story, i did not enjoy it as much as most of your others (7/10)
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