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A Beer or Two Won't Hurt
Author: Yonho
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(Added on Aug 13, 2005)
(This month 55156 readers) (Total 78997 readers) |
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Traveling across country, Tim stops at a small hotel and decides to have a beer or two at the tavern before checking in. He makes a new friend. This is an old story of mine I thought I might as well share. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (7/10) |
Average
Rating: (7.5/10) |
Highest
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Reviewer:
bottomVA
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Sep 20, 2005 |
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Needsto move faster (5/10)
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Reviewer:
2licks4u3
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Aug 21, 2005 |
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interesting story...some more ? (8/10)
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Reviewer:
Ranai
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Aug 14, 2005 |
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The way you create and gradually change atmosphere and slowly build up tension works really well. The protagonist's reactions to his quandary are amusing, as is the way his privacy is casually invaded and his company commandeered. The alcoholic excesses were something of a turn-off for me personally, but well suited to this particular storyline. Thank you! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
yonho
(Edit) (Aug 14, 2005)
- Thanks for the insightful story review. That is the type of review that is really helpful. It sounds as if at least for you the story built up in the way I intended. The drinking seemed a necessary part of the story to me in this case, though maybe it was a little overboard. Thanks again.
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Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Aug 13, 2005 |
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The story was well written and the desciprtions were excellent. Hope to read more. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
yonho
(Edit) (Aug 13, 2005)
- Thanks for the review and the good rating. I am glad you enjoyed the story. This was my first review so I really appreciate it. I should have more to contribute soon.
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Reviewer:
shymalesubuk
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Aug 13, 2005 |
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Maybe it appealed to me because as a shy submissive it is something i found easy to relate to. All I know is I enjoyed reading it (8/10)
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- Replied by:
yonho
(Edit) (Aug 13, 2005)
- Thanks for taking time to review the story. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm a shy submissive guy as well and this fantasy has always appealed to me. I'm glad someone else can relate to it.
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