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The Initiation
Author: Tyjord
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(Added on Aug 6, 2004)
(This month 16845 readers) (Total 38679 readers) |
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Aaron's pledging to a fraternity takes some unexpected twists when his sister and girlfriend decide to lend a hand. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 11, 2010 |
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Although this is story was rather predictable with a boy being tricked and painfully humilated by "the two girls special in his life" (his sister and his girlfriend), it is worth reading. It is a pity the author missed a nice little twist at the end. The girls leave after seeing him swallow the mix, now suppose he had the guts and strength of will not to swallow and started to suffocate? The whole thing would have back fired on the girls with them having to release him and/or revive (perhaps fail) someone they care for.
The above was my original review along with a rating of eight. However i have since decided the rating should be lowered to a five. My reason for the lower rating is because of the ending. Both girls leave the boy with his mouth taped closed, if his stomach reacts to the hot mix being forced in, then he could vomit and choke to death. i know this is only a story but somethings are not acceptable unless of course it is intended to be a snuff story. (5/10)
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slvWriting
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May 13, 2007 |
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Again not impressed at what this author has achieved. Too bad it doesn't look like this story will come to a close with further torments for Aaron.
Quite devilish and exquisitely told. Good going! (9/10)
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lex ludite
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Aug 8, 2004 |
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Looks like Aaron has gotten himself into a fine mess. I'm hooked and waiting to find out what new and exciting things the girls and guys from DOM and BAD have in store for him. In passing, the writing is very good and the story nicely paced. This is a good solid effort, and as a reader, it is much appreciated. (8/10)
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slaveneedledick
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Aug 7, 2004 |
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Well i sure would like to read more about the rest of the weekend. Not a bad story and the content was good. (8/10)
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