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Weekend At The Cabin
Author: casino6n8
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(Added on Jun 6, 2004)
(This month 19741 readers) (Total 57825 readers) |
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An executive gets 2 females for a weekend at a secluded cottage. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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Rating: (6.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
Jaymin
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Aug 13, 2007 |
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I very much enjoy the story so far and I an looking forward to reading further what happens to the two women during the weekend and maybe even what happens afterwards. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Jun 28, 2007 |
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The second installment improved this a lot. It's amazing what three years of improvement can do. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
casino
(Edit) (Jun 30, 2007)
- thanks for your input I hope to have further chapters soon Maybe I will not go back to how bad the first one was !!
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Aug 4, 2005 |
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Not bad except it felt like you started in the middle of the story instead of the beginning. The flow of the story was very uneven, very stop and go. (5/10)
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e.e. norcod
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Jun 9, 2004 |
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Another boring male-oriented, work-based fantasy. There, I said it, I got it off my chest. Now I feel better. Obviously the first chapter in a serial. OK author, lets get to work and start some serious writing. What we need is:
Some better description of characters and surroundings.
Motivations, what is going on in the heads of the three characters.
Novelty, what can make this story different (and better) than the hundred similar stories of this type.
Bring these two girls to life.
It is always an evil day when lex and I agree. We don't mean to be harsh but this story needs to be improved. If it does we love nothing more than to upgrade our rating.
Good luck on the next chapter! (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jun 7, 2004 |
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Not at all believable, and the lack of adequate proof reading just added to the misery of wading through this story. (4/10)
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fetish101
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Jun 7, 2004 |
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minor grammar errors aside this story has enormous potential. I can't wait to hear all the degrading and humiliating things that will happen. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 6, 2004 |
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Can't wait for the next chapters to be posted (9/10)
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- Replied by:
casino
(Edit) (Jun 30, 2007)
- It took my 3 years but I finally wrote chapter 2 Let me know what you think
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| Reviewer:
littleslut
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Jun 6, 2004 |
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The grammer and phrasing could be improved greatly in this story. I only hope that the continuing chapter(s) are better and that i can improve my rating in future. Keep at it!!
p.s. you may want to think about asking someone to proof read your work in future as this can help to eliminate any errors in a peice of work (5/10)
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- Replied by:
casino
(Edit) (Jun 30, 2007)
- 3 years later Chpater 2 is done Let me know how you like it.....I also need a sub minded person to help with this story Do you want to get involved?
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