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A Long Walk
Author: King Sand
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(Added on Jan 18, 2004)
(This month 58929 readers) (Total 118784 readers) |
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A plump young girl begins a path that will end in slavery and humiliation. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jul 19, 2008 |
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nicely done, enjoyable to read (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
bmtphoenix
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Aug 1, 2007 |
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I thought it was very good and didn't see the logistical problems that others did. I agree with the milking suggestion, and also really enjoyed the spray-on chastity stuff. Keep up with the modification! :) (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
dennisthmn
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Feb 9, 2007 |
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don't to long writing the next chapter. (9/10)
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redEva
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Jul 4, 2005 |
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Looking forward to read more. Since you have cow here, I did not expect her to be used as a beast of burden, but …well – lets see where it goes. I do hope you make use of those udders – and I believe there is good reason for stretching those teats … hoping you will induce her in ever increasing milk production (7/10)
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slo18
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May 2, 2005 |
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would love to read more of this story (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Feb 6, 2004 |
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Somewhat interesting, but at times, things just don't make any logical sense. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Wyn
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Feb 5, 2004 |
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It's interesting reading for the most part. However, a few spelling mistakes derailed the momentum of the story. There were also logistical problems that kept me asking myself, "Huh?" I recall my own experiences at a dentist office where my mouth was opened beyond what I thought possible and still being able to swallow. The intro paragraph said the girl enjoyed walking so I'm assuming that a couple of hours shouldn't be much of a problem for her. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Feb 2, 2004 |
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Unfotrunately, this is not the best writing I've seen this evening – too many things just didn’t make sense. For example, way too much saliva for a person fainting from thirst after a 2 hour walk through shade.
There was also way too much cruel, not enough tease. This wasn't well represented by the story codes.
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jan 21, 2004 |
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The author can certainly write. In a few places spell check has done him in, but that's trivial. The teen character has been fleshed out nicely, in more ways than one, but these other bozos seem to have come directly from the cookie cutter. What is this pack of slavers doing out in the middle of nowhere? Did her captor accidently discover the teen or had he been tracking her over a long period of time as she took her walks? It would have helped my enjoyment of this story if this matter had been taken care of during this rather long and very slooooow development. I also wish the author had made up his mind about just what size her breasts were. Originally she started off as probably being a 38C,but as the story went on,they seemed to grow to perhaps 40DD. My guess is that by chapter 6 she should start looking like one of those Dementia blow-up dolls. Unless the pace of this story picks up I won't be around to see her begin to float off into space. (5/10)
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bdsmbill
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Jan 19, 2004 |
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This is well written and may turn into something very good. My only regret is that a normal sized girl is being called a cow, but it is probably effective as an humiliation. (7/10)
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woolfighter
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Jan 19, 2004 |
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Nice, lets see how it develops. (8/10)
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