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The Picnic
Author: sissyslave99
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(Added on Jul 31, 2003)
(This month 57737 readers) (Total 77250 readers) |
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Gathering of several bdsm couples. the sissyslave is humiliated and punished for all to view. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Aug 6, 2003 |
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a bit far fetched and too little veriaty. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Emily
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Aug 2, 2003 |
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This reads somewhat like a diary. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
le forgeron
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Jul 31, 2003 |
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A rewrite giving more details about the progression,
such as the size and shape or the pains with a slow calendar report, might work better.
Except for the anal work of the hero, all other things are just part of the decorum so far, and it seems to be some inconsistencies (e.g.: at the end, in his shower, he remove a dildo, but where does it come from ?)
Unless rewritten, I would categorize that story as:
m-self, toys, fisting. (5/10)
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